Wednesday, October 8, 2008

The Man

He walked into the crowded room and immediately attracted the attention of all. The crowd was instantly hushed by his divine presence. Not even the softest whisper was uttered. As he made his way to the stage, his stride exuded grace and pride with every meticulous step. His majestic presence emitted an overwhelming aura. His physical form captured the heart of every woman. Everyone's gaze fixated on him, all silent with profound admiration. The ladies smiled sheepishly, sincerely deluded that they have fallen in love. The gentlemen nodded their heads, approving of him with the deepest admiration and respect. With his destination reached, he adjusted himself appropriately and parted his perfectly shaped lips, momentarily pausing before speaking. The ladies gasped softly, completely mesmerized by his charisma and charm. He stood on the stage with a perfect posture. Each spoken word taken as universal truths and wisdom. He finished with a gracious bow. The crowd, completely awed, applauded with great and heartfelt appreciation.

3 comments:

Miao said...

"Bringing about" means "causing". "Each spoken word bringing about universal truths and wisdom" means "Each spoken word causing universal truths and wisdom". Somehow I have a feeling that's not what you're trying to say. And also there's the inconsistency in tenses. He walks (present tense) into the room, and that the crowd was (past tense) hushed?

Anyway, in general, this entry is OK...

Miao said...

and then*

Coro said...

You are right. Didn't realize it before. Edited for better grammar consistency.